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Comment author: Oscar_Cunningham 13 September 2010 08:10:33AM 2 points [-]

There's a typo in this chapter: "Leah Clearwater, who had the sort of eyelashes that other women medicated themselves to get, was skeptical. But she followed Leah into the forest readily enough, shook my hand with only the barest hesitation..." Unless I'm misparsing it somehow.

Comment author: Alicorn 13 September 2010 02:20:30PM 1 point [-]

Fixed.

Comment author: Oscar_Cunningham 17 September 2010 11:58:54AM 0 points [-]

Another typo?

Eleazer noted when I asked that it wasn't a sexual attraction that she projected.

Nodded?

Comment author: Alicorn 17 September 2010 01:08:45PM 2 points [-]

No, I meant "noted". Perhaps the sentence would be clear with more commas. Eleazar notes, aloud, that Heidi does not project a sexual attraction, and so notes in response to Bella's question.