I pointed out that the concluding exhortation misses the mark.

It absolutely does. I sacrificed some precision for clarity so that I could end with a ringing exhortation. When I have a moment I'll probably footnote this.

Honestly, part of me is still a little confused about what I'm supposed to do at the ends of essays other than stop talking when I've said all the stuff I have to say.

ETA: On further reflection, the exhortation is almost right. The target you want to optimize for is "outcome in which money is worth more" but "outcome I'd really hate" is a cheaper target to compute -- it's emotionally salient, and can be quickly processed, probably in parallel -- while still being a decent pointer to the true target -- you can use a deliberative, serial process afterwards to pick the outcomes you actually should bet on.