Alicorn comments on Luminosity (Twilight Fanfic) Discussion Thread 3 - Less Wrong

10 Post author: Alicorn 30 December 2010 02:37PM

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Comment author: Alicorn 13 January 2011 01:19:04PM *  0 points [-]

I really like the writing for Allirea, but it's incredibly frustrating having important plot details constantly being hidden behind a power curtain.

There's actually nothing that would be that revelatory to the reader in Siobhan and co.'s dialogue which I've hidden behind all of Elspeth's zoning out. Like Elspeth flinging summaries every which way as she goes, it was a way to gloss over repetitive information dispensing. You guys already know who Allirea is and what she does and what her motives are.