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Giriath comments on Luminosity (Twilight Fanfic) Discussion Thread 3 - Less Wrong

10 Post author: Alicorn 30 December 2010 02:37PM

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Comment author: Giriath 28 February 2011 02:17:47PM *  0 points [-]

You mix up Grace and Gwyn in the scene in Jane's room. It should be Grace following Elspeth, but halfway through you start writing Gwyn and continue doing that throughout the chapter. Good chapter!

Comment author: Alicorn 28 February 2011 04:36:12PM 0 points [-]

Thanks, I'll fix that. (There were too many wolves to give them all names that started with different letters =/)

Comment author: JGWeissman 28 February 2011 05:49:28PM 1 point [-]

(There were too many wolves to give them all names that started with different letters =/)

Yeah, the pigeonhole principle can be a real nuisance.