Well, I deleted my post immediately because I decided I didn't want to defend it, but since you saw it I will.

"Discern" is superfluous. What distinction is intended between "rebuke" and "fault"? Using "rebuke" for a behaviour, as opposed to a person, sounds wrong to my ears -- the opposite of what is intended. What distinction is intended between "system" and "organization"? "Provoked your displeasure" is mealy-mouthed, especially when "hate" is the verb in the original. This type of writing says, I've got a thesaurus and I'm not afraid to use it.

Do you perhaps have a particular problem with semicolons? Or consider the status of urban dictionary authors insufficient to permit them the use of words like 'rebuke' and 'participant'?

Haha, no, but that's some nice assuming you've got there.