Thanks very much for your constructive criticisms, gwern.
We use italics and caps interchangeably to stress words, not specifically for humor. The example you give stresses what Shikamaru is freaking out about, and is not intended to point out humor.
If there are TVs in Naruto, there is probably science. We don't see the science specifically getting done, but we see the results of it often in the form of TVs and many other advanced technologies.
I'm intrigued by your point on Shikamaru as a game player. I'll talk to the author about how we can explore that aspect in future. Shikamaru can be a game player and a scientist. And a ninja.
Concerning your point on "oxygen": you may have missed the story background in the bio.
Thanks for pointing out the spelling error.
And yes, we are heavily influenced by MoR, and we are trying to develop our own voice over time. Thanks for pointing out this influence, though.
Thanks again, gwern.
If there are TVs in Naruto, there is probably science. We don't see the science specifically getting done, but we see the results of it often in the form of TVs and many other advanced technologies.
That always bugged me about Naruto - it seemed inconsistent, like many of the things in Harry Potter that MoR points out.
Although while we're discussing the topic, I'm not sure a TV necessarily indicates/requires science. China and Japan both reached quite high levels of technology without any formal science tradition. (I read through 1 volume of Science and ...
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