Thanks, Pavitra.
Could we be doing a better job of emphasizing Shikamaru's rationality?
I agree with you on clearer introductions to characters. I'll talk to the author about how best to accomplish this. Do you have any suggestions, yourself?
Could we be doing a better job of emphasizing Shikamaru's rationality?
If by this you mean "should we be emphasizing it more", then no, I'd tone it down.
If you mean "is there room for improvement in the way in which we emphasize", then I'd suggest trying to use phrasings either idiomatic to a baseline audience, or developing naturally from the context you present. Avoid using the kind of technical jargon you're used to using when you think about these things.
For example, consider the following:
..."ASUMA!" he screamed. He hesi
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