The Qualia sequence is pretty much correct, but I feel like it was a bit drawn out. The agent networks are interesting, but I think that you could get most of the (directly relevant to qualia) information out of the idea that there's a particular neural activation pattern for red that you can't activate through learning lots of things about how humans perceive red.

Thanks. I do still think that some discussion of conscious/unconscious minds is needed for explaining why colors feel ineffable (and why it seems an equivocation to ask whether Mary learned something), but I probably could have taken a simpler first pass...