Thanks everyone! I'll get all your corrections in tomorrow :)

EDIT- All corrections have been made. Thanks!...I am unsure if I want to post a summary or not though. I've got it edited down to a little less than half the length right now, but if I can't get it to be at least a third of the length, then there's really no point to it. I play around with a little more, and we'll see. Mainly its just a PITA.