This [Occams prior] actually did bother me slightly, considering how to rework it.

I'd suggest to simply get rid of that line.

I actually think some of the complex words are necessary to create some contrast between the naive, aspiring rationalist and the austere rationalist.

I don't see the difference between linguistically vs. verbally as one of technical-complex vs. naive-simple but as one of convoluted vs. understandable.

Have you read Beyond the Reach of God?

I have read it in the past, but I couldn't have told you what it says before looking it up.