ArisKatsaris comments on HPMOR: What could've been done better? - Less Wrong

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Comment author: ArisKatsaris 28 January 2012 08:13:35PM 12 points [-]

I think it's somewhat premature to talk about what could be done better before the story is complete. For starters, I'm not sure it psychologically counts as positive reinforcement of the writer writing more quickly, if one criticizes too much while still it's being written...

  • That having been said, I'd like to say that I found chapter 19 (where Harry is made to "lose") very unbelievable.
  • The relationship between battles, Quirrel points, and the wish Quirrel offered to the person out of all 7 years who'd have the highest number of Quirrel points could also have been done a bit better, I think. Right now, though the determinator is supposed to be the Quirrel points everyone was acting as if the sole determinator were the battles, and the battles of only the first year for that matter.

Lastly, I'd like to say, in order to partially counteract the opinion offered by others, that I found the Hermione-SPHEW chapters the best arc in the whole story -- far better than the Azkaban arc, far better than the armies arc.

Comment author: Anubhav 29 January 2012 05:51:43AM 16 points [-]

I'm not sure it psychologically counts as positive reinforcement of the writer writing more quickly, if one criticizes too much while still it's being written...

Eliezer has said he doesn't mind this thread. (I PM'd him before creating it.)

Comment author: atorm 28 January 2012 10:53:28PM 8 points [-]

Agree on bulleted points, but I thought the armies arc was the best by far. I sell HPMoR to my friends by saying "Ender Wiggin goes to Hogwarts!"

Comment author: ArisKatsaris 30 January 2012 10:50:19AM 12 points [-]

Ender Wiggin is just pretend-smart - as mentioned in Adam Cadre's review, his tactics tend to work by authorial fiat. I think HJPEV is much better written, where tactics are concerned.

(As a sidenote, I mentioned HPMOR in the comments to that review and got atleast one more enthusiastic reader for it. :-)

Comment author: James_Blair 30 January 2012 03:06:38AM *  2 points [-]

The one time I tried this, it backfired terribly. It seemed like a logical sale, but the war games don't start until quite a fair way in; meanwhile, the first ten chapters (which is what the first chapter recommends trying before giving up) don't have that sort of flavour.

Comment author: Kaj_Sotala 29 January 2012 06:38:07PM 0 points [-]

Huh. I'd thought of MoR as a better version of Ender's Game before, but for some reason I didn't catch that similarity.

Comment author: [deleted] 28 January 2012 08:28:00PM *  1 point [-]

Agreed on nearly point, emphasis on the first, that this thread won't have a good effect on the author's progress.

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