ShardPhoenix comments on HPMOR: What could've been done better? - Less Wrong

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Comment author: ShardPhoenix 29 January 2012 05:29:19AM 1 point [-]

Occasionally the writing and sentence structure can feel a little hurried, especially at the beginning of chapters. It's as if Eliezer starts writing at the beginning of a chapter but takes a while to fully get into his rhythm. There have also probably been a few too many tangents from the main plot, but Eliezer's latest author note seems to acknowledge this.