Okay, given those two examples I think your objections are nitpicks. I think you're probably unsatisfied with the piece for other, unmentioned reasons that you might not have introspective access to. Same with the people who upvoted Manfred's comment, which singles out the only paragraph in the piece that could really be interpreted as containing much too much fluff, and even then I explicitly recommended that people who weren't interested in the meta stuff about the blog skip ahead to the discussion of the solution only.

Overall, given the criticisms of the piece, I think I should be satisfied that I didn't leave out anything important, and that people who are unsatisfied with it are mostly not the people I want in my audience anyway. I'm left thinking that my primary aim should be to experiment with writing style more.