DaFranker comments on Subsuming Purpose, Part 1 - Less Wrong

1 Post author: OrphanWilde 10 August 2012 06:45PM

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Comment author: DaFranker 10 August 2012 05:38:46PM 5 points [-]

This will be the subject of a future post, presuming this one is well-received.

I think your post would benefit from having "meta" or off-main-topic comments like this be put as footnotes rather than directly in the main text.

As for the article itself, it's a bit hard to follow properly. The flow of communication seems somewhat broken and appears to jump from point to point, eventually covering the entire matter but in a less effective manner than if the core ideas and beliefs were more clearly separated from the explanation, inferences, comparisons, examples, and other supportive material. Not implying there should be a clean division into two parts, but rather that paragraphs and text formatting could be reworked into a more effective and convincing whole.

Other than that, I like the content so far and am looking forwards to reading more!

Comment author: OrphanWilde 10 August 2012 05:58:45PM 4 points [-]

Looks like I need to pull this back into my drafts and fiddle with it. Thank you for the feedback!