My Little Pony (generation 4) has 2 immortal characters, who get a lot of sympathy from the bronies. "How sad! Poor Celestia and Luna must see everyone they know grow old and die. How much better to die yourself!"
I tried to write a fanfic saying that death was bad. But I had to make it a story, and it ended up having other themes. I don't know whether I like it or not, but it was very popular (now approaching 7000 views in 3 days on fimfiction).
I was pretty sure the message "death is bad" was still in there, because Celestia says things like "Death is bad" and "I'm afraid of dying." So imagine my surprise when comment after comment said, "Yes, immortality is such a curse!"
Why did so many people come away saying that? Tell me what you think. It will help to know that Twilight regularly writes "friendship report" letters to Celestia describing what she has learned about friendship, and that Twilight and Celestia have an especially close relationship.
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Mortality Report on google docs (comment-enabled), 4000 words.
Spoilers after the bar.
I can see two things that happened:
- I overplayed the "death is bad" angle, to the point where readers thought Celestia wanted to die to get away from having to deal with death. These readers didn't like the story as much, because they thought she was being selfish rather than selfless.
- Most readers who figured out the evolutionary plan kicked back hard and called it evil. That implied that Celestia was rationalizing very badly in agreeing to the plan in theory, and they then presumed her final actions were selfish.
This is stunningly good. There are only a few flaws and they would be very easy to fix, like the explicit mention of "evolutionary psychology" - which can be fixed by just deleting the texts "from evolutionary psychology" and "the dominance of individual over group selection" and leaving the rest of the paragraph exactly unchanged...
...actually, I think that's the only flaw I found, which is amazing.