I wonder if other people feel the same way about my writing?

I think there's room in the world for both writing styles. Actually, I'd strengthen that: I'm glad there are people writing in a loosier, chattier style with bite-size paragraphs, and I'm glad there are people writing in a more systematic A-then-B-then-C form. I like a degree of variety.

Edit: I guess I didn't really address your question directly. To be explicit, I was fine with your writing style here, and I liked the care you took to connect what you were saying to specific cognitive biases. I don't recall ever thinking "whoa, this cousin_it article is too dry for me" when reading one of your non-decision-theory posts. (And I don't know how easy it is to add emotional arcs to more technical posts about decision theory!)

The article is indeed well-written, if misleadingly titled. The point it is really making, "don't pick a high-status career, unless you are super exceptional" is masked by the stated conclusion, "don't do what you love or you will starve", which does not follow. There are plenty of opportunities to "do what you love" in "mundane" jobs.

And yes, you could use some practice writing in a more engaging way. Is there Writing for non-Vulcans 101?

Paul Graham has a similar essay, called How To Do What You Love which is somewhat less pessimistic, but still agrees that there are a lot of things people can love that they can't make a living doing.