MathMage comments on Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality discussion thread, February 2015, chapter 112 - Less Wrong

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Comment author: MarkusRamikin 25 February 2015 09:47:44PM 2 points [-]

Harry continued pointing his wand downward, insofar as he had been told that, if he tried to raise it, he would die. He remained silent, insofar as he had been told that if he tried to speak, he would die.

This seems an incorrect usage of "insofar as", since it means "to the extent that", not "because" or "since". Native speakers, what do you think?

Comment author: MathMage 26 February 2015 12:38:53AM *  3 points [-]

Native speaker--it's not wrong, but it is somewhat awkward. That said, the whole excerpt is redundant, so I'd be making more extensive changes than replacing "insofar as" with something else if I were editing. (Also: "He tried not to shiver in the falling night temperatures, for...it was getting colder.")

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