I liked Robby's introduction to the book overall, but I find it somewhat ironic that right after the prologue where Eliezer mentions that one of his biggest mistakes in writing the Sequences was focusing on abstract philosophical problems that are removed from people's daily problems, the introduction begins with

Imagine reaching into an urn that contains seventy white balls and thirty red ones, and plucking out ten mystery balls.

The first (though not necessarily best) example of how to rewrite this in less abstract form that comes to mind would be something like "Imagine that you're standing by the entrance of a university whose students are seven tenths female and three tenths male, and observing ten students go in..."; with the biased example being "On the other hand, suppose that you happen to be standing by the entrance of the physics department, which is mostly male even though the university in general is mostly female."

Some unnecessary technical jargon that could have been gotten rid of also caught my eye in the first actual post: e.g. "Rational agents make decisions that maximize the probabilistic expectation of a coherent utility function" could have been rewritten to be more broadly understandable, e.g. "rational agents make decisions that are the most likely to produce the kinds of outcomes they'd like to see".

I could spend some time making notes of these kinds of things and offering suggested rewrites for making the printed book more broadly accessible - would MIRI be interested in that, or would they prefer to keep the content as is?