Overall, I thought it was very good. I agree that "super optimizer" is more likely to create the correct impression in the average person than "super intelligence", and will stop using the latter term.
The bit about the "golem genie" seems forced, though-- I'm not sure it actually clarifies things. It seems like such a direct analogy; I'd expect that people that understand "superoptimizer" won't need the analogy, and those who don't understand, won't be helped by it. For the latter group of people, it might help to introduce the golem before talking about superoptimization at all. It's quite possible I'm wrong
Louie and I are sharing a draft of our chapter submission to The Singularity Hypothesis for feedback:
The Singularity and Machine Ethics
Thanks in advance.
Also, thanks to Kevin for suggesting in February that I submit an abstract to the editors. Seems like a lifetime ago, now.
Edit: As of 3/31/2012, the link above now points to a preprint.