I find this chatty, informal style a lot easier to read than your formal style. The sentences are shorter and easier to follow, and it flows a lot more naturally. For example, compare your introduction to rationality in From Skepticism to Technical Rationality to that in The Cognitive Science of Rationality. Though the latter defines its terms more precisely, the former is much easier to read.
Probably relevant: this comment by Yvain.
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