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Hansenista comments on Beyond the Reach of God, Abridged for Spoken Word - Less Wrong Discussion

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Comment author: Hansenista 06 December 2011 11:22:18PM *  -2 points [-]

In the second paragraph, I would strike this line:

Parents don't do everything their children ask.

as it seems to interrupt the flow.

Comment author: Raemon 07 December 2011 05:48:59AM 1 point [-]

I think it helps establish the overall parent-child metaphor, which is important to the work.

Comment author: Hansenista 07 December 2011 07:01:56PM 0 points [-]

After reading it over again, I think I agree with you.

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