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RolfAndreassen comments on Link: Thoughts on the basic income pilot, with hedgehogs - Less Wrong Discussion

3 Post author: Jacobian 04 May 2016 05:47PM

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Comment author: [deleted] 04 May 2016 06:47:44PM *  4 points [-]

Advice (grain of salt here) from a journalistic perspective:

  1. Less pictures. They distract from your point, adding little-to-nothing (for me, personally, nothing). If you want to keep some "personality," one pic akin to the hedgehog suffices.
  2. Less links. Links should show data, and be relevant to not just the specific point but the overall message. I.e. your link to the goat race needlessly takes your reader away from the page. Time is the fundamental currency of life, and they might not invest as much if you constantly redirect them. Also, for purposeful links, use Wiki-esque formatting: number, then actual link in footnote.
  3. Less words. We see your earnestness and tone throughout the post--your writing style very clearly reflects you, which is great! Now the challenge: take out the fluff while still keeping yourself in there.

Essentially: less, less, less. "If I had more time, I would write less."

All that said, I am excited to see where this project goes. I will donate when I have the funds. Thanks for sharing. :)

Comment author: RolfAndreassen 21 May 2016 04:58:04AM -1 points [-]

All three things are quantised and should take 'fewer': Fewer pictures, fewer links, fewer words. Less is for things that aren't countable; less liquid, less wrong.

Comment author: username2 21 May 2016 05:24:09AM 1 point [-]