I have only skimmed your post, but now feel motivated to leave feedback as requested. It is possible that some of my objections are misplaced, addressed somewhere in the depths of this article that my eyes glazedly passed over. In fact, my first complaint is that:
it is too long. LW tolerates long articles under limited circumstances and this doesn't meet any of them (you're not an established poster, don't have fifty footnotes with sources, don't apologize off the bat for length, and have missed many obvious opportunities for compression/excision). You should have made it much shorter (500 words about what the hell Direct Instruction consists of) or much much shorter (a two-sentence blurb with a link to more information).
It's sales-y. Full of applause lights (counted five instances of the string "rational" in your text). You claim that your intent is to pique interest, but that is not done by saying "This thing is interesting! This thing is interesting!" repeatedly in the local idiom.
It is badly structured. Rambles all over the place. If you laid out the contents of your article in conceptspace and made me walk from point to point in the order you present them, my feet would get tired and I would become dizzy. You have definitely not convinced me that you have learned a secret of how to teach things, on a meta as well as object level.
It makes you look like a crank. If DI needs this much fluff and meandering and enthusiastic pitching, it's probably not interesting. Oops.
In fact, the only reason I am bothering to think about this article ever again, having successfully scrolled all the way down to the unnecessary signature, is that you do repeatedly ask for feedback. If you're sincere about that: I invite you to post, as a reply to this comment, a 1-3 sentence description of what DI is, plus one sentence about whatever evidence (beyond your enthusiasm about it) which exists for its splendidness. (Last sentence but not the first 1-3 can be/consist primarily of linkage.)
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