Hiyah!
I'm a somewhat big fan of Twilight universe. And rare adult male breed that enjoys this kind of thing, lol. From all ppl I know only my close friend who twisted me into this like it. For eg first thing I saw was movie, wich made me in love with Alice character. Watching movie and few cool ideas from it like vampire baseball forced me into reading it both in polish and english, as I came from Poland Kingdom ;p
To be honest I don't really like fanfics, mostly they are just dumb excuse to position one in world they love more then our own... and usually it ends bad. Really bad. Like, I am sure You know - dozens of bad fan fiction wich shouldn't exist as it just proves that age of global network ruined whole "art of word".
BUT, I really enjoyed Luminosity. The ideas you've came with are just ingenious. The way Alice reacted to whole 'car out of control' situation was epic. By big, shiny capital 'e' letter. Or Carlisle acting like baboon shaman from Lion King 3, where he just listened to Timons monologue and by that helped him solve meta-physical issue. Or gettin' Victoria dead and luring James into certain-death. Maaan... if all other ff were so cool as yer's I would enjoy my life more.
Still, there are things I just don't like at all. Like... such short lovely show ;p just as we got end of book one, we, the readers, are thrown into cold-blooded full-scale war and many sad things. I understand why you did this. I mean as you described things Volturi just saw potential threat in Cullen coven... mind-reader, mood-shifter, future-seer, calm and blood-immune leader... AND now shield that is invulnerable from witch-power... at least those threatening...
Still... one more book, a book describing vampire life through eyes of someone like your Bella... in such interesting coven like Cullens AND Quilette trive allies/friends. Like someone earlier said, your art lacks vampire-side. Like... I dunno, you should at least go with Bellas colegue in Alasca, wich also would get us beter opinion on Dali coven.
But meh. I'm not ungrateful. I really appreciate your work. Wich also leads to my primary goal in writing here. Could I obtain your blessing with translation? The fan-made one, that will of course be in your crafty hands. I just think your ff should be in more then one language, to be enjoyable by far bigger audience <3
Well, it is polite to ask before attempting to do it ;3
And thanks ;3 I'll try my best.