Potential issues (the results of my 5 minutes of thought)
1) Opportunity cost. Should people practice being brief, over other things (like maybe speedreading, or improving their ability to quickly read academic papers or statistics?)
1a) i.e. Academia isn't going to change, and if we want scientifically literate ideas, we will need to be better at understanding opaque, jargon-filled academic-ese, or mathy stats stuff. So maybe that's a better use of time?
1b) On the flipside, 1a is HARD to do for many people, whereas anyone can start practicing being brief wi...
Yeah, this seemed like a good introduction.
It doesn't seem like it's yet gotten to the part where we (generic hypothetical reader "we") know if the sequence was going anywhere new yet. So I'd hope to see one or two posts exploring the further ramifications that I assume you're building towards before evaluating whether this post worked in isolation.
Mild aesthetic note: I felt like it apologized a bit too much for the outlandish metaphors. I think a single apology in the beginning and then just owning it would probably be better.