Excellent post - substantial, important, and most legible indeed! I wanted to include a couple thoughts about some forms of legibility that seem under-emphasized here.
Cruxiness
Cruxiness is a key part of epistemic legibility that perhaps could use some extra emphasis here. Don't just be clear about the evidence on which your beliefs are based - prioritize and weigh that evidence. Being explicit about some of the justifications for your beliefs is helpful. Far better, though, to be explicit about which of these justifications, if falsified, you would consider most damaging to your argument.
Audience expectations and your level of confidence seem important in choosing where to be cruxy. An informational scientific poster for the lay public probably doesn't need to include the phrase ".. and if you can disprove X, we'll take this poster down."
It can also be challenging to accurately determine your crux, or precisely how you'd change your mind in response to new evidence. If some evidence comes out against the most important underpinnings of Dweck's rationale for growth mindset, what exactly should she do? Abandon growth mindset entirely? Interrogate the challenging evidence? Acknowledge it and tone down the most extravagent claims a bit? It would be unfair to insist that anybody making an argument have answers to all these questions.
There are alternatives to publishing the complete blueprints of your argument, though. One is to articulate your major uncertainties, and whatever next steps you plan to investigate next.
Contextualizing
The introduction of almost any scientific paper will contextualize the research in a body of prior scholarship. This is part of showing the basis of evidence for the argument, as well as for motivating the work, but it also makes the community of scholarship legible. The work no longer appears superficially to be a standalone, definitive source, but a single voice in a larger debate. Here's an example from ACOUP's new series on the fall of Rome:
As will readily be apparent, that significance of that division of topics will be important because this is one of those questions where what you see depends very much on where you look, with scholars engaging with different topics often coming to wildly divergent conclusions about the impact and experience of the fall of Rome. And there is no way to really discuss that divergence (and my own view of it) without diving into the still active debate and presenting the different scholarly views in a sort of duel. I’ll be providing my own judgements, of course, but I intend here to ‘steelman’ each argument, presenting it in what I view as its strongest form; as will some become evident, I think there is some truth to both of the two major current scholarly streams of thought here.
So who are our combatants? To understand this, we have to lay out a bit of the ‘history of the history’ – what is called historiography in technical parlance. Here I am also going to note the rather artificial but importance field distinction here between ancient (Mediterranean) history and medieval European history. As we’ll see, viewing this as the end of the Roman period gives quite a different impression than viewing it as the beginning of a new European Middle Ages. The two fields ‘connect’ in Late Antiquity (the term for this transitional period, broadly the 4th to 8th centuries), but most programs and publications are either ancient or medieval and where scholars hail from can lead to different (not bad, different) perspectives.
Devereaux goes on for 10 paragraphs contextualizing this series of 3 blog posts before diving into his analysis. Having done this work, he's able to refer to his framing throughout. This permits him to go beyond arguing for one side or the other, and to engage in an act of synthesis. He can divide "the fall of Rome" into multiple categories (words, institutions, things and people), as well as subcategories, and show that in some (sub)categories, we have more change-and-continuity, while in others we have more of a decline.
This isn't just about sourcing specific facts, though Devereaux does that too. It's about giving the reader a bird's eye view of this field of historical writing, so that the reader never loses sight of the fact that diverse viewpoints exist on every facet of a debate with which they're likely to be relatively unfamiliar. Devereaux sets himself up as an informed and opinionated guide to this debate, rather than as its final arbiter.
Curated. Posts like this one that introduce a new research concept, if they succeed, can be incredibly high return in both improving subsequent research that's influenced by the new concept and in improving discussion and evaluation of research. It's a great contribution to the epistemic commons – I'm very pleased to see this piece. I hope to see more on the topic of "epistemic cooperation".
Today, dynomight made an interesting nuance in Observations about writing and commenting on the internet. It seems that just optimizing epistemic legibility may cause people to fail to listen altogether:
Technically, the complaints were wrong. How could I “fix” the problem of not citing any papers when I had already cited dozens? That’s what I thought for months, during which people continued to read the post and have the same damned reaction. Eventually, I had to confront that even if they were “wrong”, something about my post was causing them to be wrong. Viewed that way, the problem was obvious: The idea that a humidifier could be bad for you is weird and disturbing, and weird and disturbing things are usually wrong so people are skeptical and tend to find ways to dismiss them.
Should they do that?
[Insert long boring polemic on Bayesian rationality]
It’s debatable—but it’s a fact that they do it. So I rewrote the post to be “gentle”. Previously my approach was to sort of tackle the reader and scream “HUMIDIFIERS → PARTICLES! [citation] [citation] [citation] [citation]” and “PARTICLES → DEATH! [citation] [citation] [citation]”. I changed it to start by conceding that ultrasonic humidifiers don’t always make particles and it’s not certain those particular particles cause harm, et cetera, but PEER-REVIEWED RESEARCH PAPERS says these things are possible, so it’s worth thinking about.
After making those changes, no one had the same reaction anymore.
Part of me feels like this is wrong, that it’s disingenuous to tune writing to make people have the reaction you want them to have. After all, I could be wrong, in which case it’s better if my wrongness is more obvious.
At least when I make my reasoning transparent and easy to falsify, I feel like I discard other qualities of writing, because I feel that should be enough. But to get an audience, it's still important to try to sell it. Not by reverting to opaque reasoning, of course, but perhaps by demonstrating empathy with the reader, understanding of the inferential gap and... I don't know what else.
Maybe it's related to the concept in rhetoric of creating a "good audience": encouraging them to be "attentus, docilis et benevolus":
A related saying in programming:
"There are two ways to develop software: Make it so simple that there are obviously no bugs, or so complex that there are no obvious bugs."
Your description of legibility actually influences the way I think of this quote: what it is referring to is legibility, which isn't always the same as what one might think of as "simplicity".
This is an excellent post. I expect (and hope!) it will shape how I handle disagreements.
"The person counters every objection raised, but the counters aren’t logically consistent with each other."
Is there a particular term for this? This is something I've encountered before, and having a handle for it might help with addressing it.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kettle_logic, though I'm not sure I've ever encountered the term in the wild.
This was an excellent post. Thanks for writing it.
I also appreciate that you made the costs of legibility explicit. Duncan's essay Ruling Out Everything Else touches on a related theme, but I only realized some time after reading that essay that trying to be so precise in one's speech can result in written discussions getting much longer. Which imposes yet other costs.
This post helped me distinguish between having good reasons for my beliefs, and being able to clearly communicate and explain my reasoning, and (to me) painted the latter as pro-social and as a virtue rather than a terrible cost I was expected to pay.
Strong agree, crucial points, +4.
Shared frames are investments that allows us to coordinate better. This, I think, is a good frame.
This allows me to express some of the thoughts I've had in a way that's clearer to myself and easier for other to comprehend, if they are familiar with the frame. For example: "Why would anyone pay for medical advice that isn't epistemically legible?"
An aside, I also found your post on butterfly ideas really insightful, though I'm biased by being a HSP with a significant portion of my mental models more-or-less being "butterfly ideas".
My guess is that most of the issues come from motivated cognition, where all the object level arguments hide the meta-level issue. Dweck seems unusual in that regard, she wants the growth mindset to be true, but also is meticulous in her approach. W.L Craig is a Christian apologist disguised as a philosopher, so he has 1000 proofs of God ready to throw at you, and to clever-arguer anyone who listens using a slew of carefully crafted object level arguments.
CDC and other public orgs operate at the Simulacrum level 1 (typo edited: level 2, of course), putting out statements designed to elicit a certain behavior, and unrelated to what they believe to be true. So it's inaccurate to model them as interested in truth.
You can spot the existence of a hidden meta level by noticing self-contradictory arguments, lack of legibility, loose and context-dependent or even non-existent definitions of crucially important terms... At which point it doesn't pay to go through the object level anymore, and instead focus on the meta.
It's true that motivated cognition and such issues are at work; they always are! But this is no ding on demanding epistemic legibility.
Even if the author never was interested in transmitting truth (like the CDC in your example), now you know how to detect a message that's hard to critique / spot check.
Rereading your comment, I think you're saying that legibility will arise by itself well enough so long as someone is on Simulacrum level 1, caring only about the truth, and if their writing is not legible, they probably have an agenda and you'd better focus on finding out what that is, or just ignore what they said.
But
I see that you use/used Roam Research. It must have influenced you into developing the concept? I'm doing something similar with my own zettelkasten, trying to make it help me propagate belief changes and build gears-level understanding, so I started to identify exactly why I believe things. That means maximize Epistemic Legibility.
For example, I used to make the bald statement "carbohydrates cause oxidation". In a Zettel note on carbohydrates, I either expand with a mechanism ("by way of sugar combustion leaving behind reactive oxygen species"), or when I know no clear mechanism, where I got the idea from ("see correlations in study X"/"see reasoning in blog post Y"), or when I can't be bothered, simply qualified with my current epistemic status ("60% confident, 2022-02-12").
The concept was by and large inspired by starting (but not checking) Against The Grain in 2019, and I wrote it up when I realized I wanted to be able to point it when criticizing articles. There's an unaired podcast recording of me going "this was so great, I sure hope it checks out", and I'm so grateful I hedged now.
I did read ATG within the first few months after discovering Roam. You might be interested in this post I did doing an epistemic spot check on the same book with and without Roam, which was only slightly before I read Against the Grain the first time.
I had the concept of epistemic spot check before I used Roam, and don't use nearly as formal a system now as I describe in the linked blog post or contemporaneous ones, but the intermediate period where I was using Roam very formally probably was quite helpful.
Something you allude to, but don't make very explicit, is that legibility occurs inside the reader. In this way, it is much like beauty. What we term beautiful things are things that either we personally find beautiful, or things that most viewers will believe are beautiful (out of what subset of observers?). That said, I expect the tips in "How to be Legible" will tend to improve legibility for nearly all readers, so I definitely think it's coherent to talk about a work as legible in and of itself.
An aside: I initially interpreted "term of art" as something like "a term which is used for artistic flourish", since I was unaware that it had a definition as a phrase (I thought it was, under my naive definition, a term of art). I was slightly saddened by the fact that it isn't an industry term (and therefore is not, according to the dictionary, a term of art).
I think the post disagrees with you:
I expect having a handle with which to say “no I don’t have a concise argument about why this work is wrong, and that’s a fact about the work” to be very useful.
That a work is Epistemically Legible doesn't mean you'll comprehend it: you may be lacking necessary background context, for example. See the section Legibility vs Inferential Distance.
In this case, an E-Legible work will still bless you with the awareness that you were missing background context, so that you didn't understand what was said -- as opposed to giving you a fake feeling that you understood. That's more a property of the work than of the reader, right? You cannot sensibly discount the work's contribution to such a result.
To be clear, I do believe that the work itself is a significant contributor to the epistemic legibility. My point was merely that the work can only ever be legible with respect to a particular reader or audience (or even expected audience). In this way, I believe it is similar to inferential distance. An idea is not inferentially distant on its own, it is only inferentially distant from someone's perspective[1]. Where inferential distance deals with the difficulty of understanding a work, epistemic legibility deals with the difficulty of verifying a work. Perhaps an example in which the inferential distance is low but epistemic legibility is low or high depending on the audience will be illuminating:
Rajiv writes a well researched book about encryption algorithms, in which he cites various journal articles published on the subject. Carol is a bright computer scientist with poor judgment who phished people for their bank credentials and got caught. As a result, she is imprisoned and due to the nature of her crime forbidden from accessing the internet while serving her time. She receives a copy of Rajiv's book through the prison library system, and enjoys it quite a bit. She understands all of the ideas, but wants to check out some of the journal articles to see if Rajiv relayed the ideas correctly and also to further her understanding. The prison librarian checks the price of getting access to these articles, her eyes briefly widen when Carol informs her that she intends to get about a dozen of these articles, and then the librarian tells her there is no way in which she gets any of these articles. Carol is completely unable to verify any of the claims made in Rajiv's book. A year later, Carol is released from prison, and a couple quick searches reveal the journal articles that Rajiv references, and she is able to verify Rajiv's claims to her heart's content. In this example, the inferential distance is low throughout, but the epistemic legibility of Rajiv's book depends in part on whether or not Carol is imprisoned (unimprisoned Carol could be replaced with some other bright unimprisoned computer scientist).
That was an example of there being differences in the access of information that varies the epistemic legibility of a work. Epistemic legibility might also vary depending on audience when there is the potential for a double illusion of transparency. When this occurs, some audience members will walk away with a confident but incorrect understanding of the work while others might walk away with a confident but correct understanding. This will frequently occur when the language used has variable interpretations (which Elizabeth covered with her discussion of "common knowledge" and inferential distance) or when inferential distance is high.
I don't think this point is central to Elizabeth's post (which evaluates works from the perspective of a static reader), so I apologize if I had given the impression that she made some error by not placing emphasis on this. I merely thought it was an interesting frame from which to examine the idea of epistemic legibility.
One point of contrast is that inferential distance likely varies more between audience members than epistemic legibility for a given work. This difference in variability means that it is generally more useful to talk about the epistemic legibility of a work as a whole, but to focus on individual differences for inferential distance
Thanks for the detailed example of what you meant, it's really helpful. I see what you're getting at, and it would be insane to say legibility was completely independent of the reader, but I do view epistemic legibility as much more dependent on the work and not the reader than inferential distance, where the load is basically balanced.
In my model, Carol's ability to check out the articles does not reflect on the book's epistemic legibility. It definitely affects her ability to check or understand the work, but I'd say the book did its work in being legible by making it possible for Carol to figure out how she needed to follow up, or even just that follow-up was necessary. She'll understand more when she can check out the articles, but the book met its bar of legibility by not giving her a false impression of understanding more than she did.
Tl;dr: being easy to argue with is a virtue, separate from being correct.
Introduction
Regular readers of my blog know of my epistemic spot check series, where I take claims (evidential or logical) from a work of nonfiction and check to see if they’re well supported. It’s not a total check of correctness: the goal is to rule out things that are obviously wrong/badly formed before investing much time in a work, and to build up my familiarity with its subject.
Before I did epistemic spot checks, I defined an easy-to-read book as, roughly, imparting an understanding of its claims with as little work from me as possible. After epistemic spot checks, I started defining easy to read as “easy to epistemic spot check”. It should be as easy as possible (but no easier) to identify what claims are load-bearing to a work’s conclusions, and figure out how to check them. This is separate from correctness: things can be extremely legibly wrong. The difference is that when something is legibly wrong someone can tell you why, often quite simply. Illegible things just sit there at an unknown level of correctness, giving the audience no way to engage.
There will be more detailed examples later, but real quick: “The English GDP in 1700 was $890324890. I base this on $TECHNIQUE interpretation of tax records, as recorded in $REFERENCE” is very legible (although probably wrong, since I generated the number by banging on my keyboard). “Historically, England was rich” is not. “Historically, England was richer than France” is somewhere in-between.
“It was easy to apply this blog post format I made up to this book” is not a good name, so I’ve taken to calling the collection of traits that make things easy to check “epistemic legibility”, in the James C. Scott sense of the word legible. Legible works are (comparatively) easy to understand, they require less external context, their explanations scale instead of needing to be tailored for each person. They’re easier to productively disagree with, easier to partially agree with instead of forcing a yes or no, and overall easier to integrate into your own models.
[Like everything in life, epistemic legibility is a spectrum, but I’ll talk about it mostly as a binary for readability’s sake]
When people talk about “legible” in the Scott sense they often mean it as a criticism, because pushing processes to be more legible cuts out illegible sources of value. One of the reasons I chose the term here is that I want to be very clear about the costs of legibility and the harms of demanding it in excess. But I also think epistemic legibility leads people to learn more correct things faster and is typically underprovided in discussion.
If I hear an epistemically legible argument, I have a lot of options. I can point out places I think the author missed data that impacts their conclusion, or made an illogical leap. I can notice when I know of evidence supporting their conclusions that they didn’t mention. I can see implications of their conclusions that they didn’t spell out. I can synthesize with other things I know, that the author didn’t include.
If I hear an illegible argument, I have very few options. Perhaps the best case scenario is that it unlocks something I already knew subconsciously but was unable to articulate, or needed permission to admit. This is a huge service! But if I disagree with the argument, or even just find it suspicious, my options are kind of crap. I write a response of equally low legibility, which is unlikely to improve understanding for anyone. Or I could write up a legible case for why I disagree, but that is much more work than responding to a legible original, and often more work than went into the argument I’m responding to, because it’s not obvious what I’m arguing against. I need to argue against many more things to be considered comprehensive. If you believe Y because of X, I can debate X. If you believe Y because …:shrug:… I have to imagine every possible reason you could do so, counter all of them, and then still leave myself open to something I didn’t think of. Which is exhausting.
I could also ask questions, but the more legible an argument is, the easier it is to know what questions matter and the most productive way to ask them.
I could walk away, and I am in fact much more likely to do that with an illegible argument. But that ends up creating a tax on legibility because it makes one easier to argue with, which is the opposite of what I want.
Not everything should be infinitely legible. But I do think more legibility would be good on most margins, that choices of the level of legibility should be made more deliberately, and that we should treat highly legible and illegible works more differently than we currently do. I’d also like a common understanding of legibility so that we can talk about its pluses and minuses, in general or for a particular piece.
This is pretty abstract and the details matter a lot, so I’d like to give some better examples of what I’m gesturing at. In order to reinforce the point that legibility and correctness are orthogonal; this will be a four quadrant model.
True and Legible
Picking examples for this category was hard. No work is perfectly true and perfectly legible, in the sense of being absolutely impossible to draw an inaccurate conclusion from and having no possible improvements to legibility, because reality is very complicated and communication has space constraints. Every example I considered, I could see a reason someone might object to it. And the things that are great at legibility are often boring. But it needs an example so…
Acoup
Bret Devereaux over at Acoup consistently writes very interesting history essays that I found both easy to check and mostly true (although with some room for interpretation, and not everyone agrees). Additionally, a friend of mine who is into textiles tells me his textile posts were extremely accurate. So Devereaux does quite well on truth and legibility, despite bringing a fair amount of emotion and strong opinions to his work.
As an example, here is a paragraph from a post arguing against descriptions of Sparta as a highly equal society.
Here we have some facts on the ground (Spartiates could kill their slaves, killing slaves was murder in most contemporaneous societies), sources for some but not all of them (those parentheticals are highly readable if you’re a classicist, and workable if you’re not), the inference he drew from them (Spartans treated their slaves unusually badly), and the conclusions he drew from that (Sparta was not only inequitable, it was unusually inequitable even for its time and place).
Notably, the entire post relies heavily on the belief that slavery is bad, which Devereaux does not bother to justify. That’s a good choice because it would be a complete waste of time for modern audiences – but it also makes this post completely unsuitable for arguing with anyone who disagreed. If for some reason you needed to debate the ethics of slavery, you need work that makes a legible case for that claim in particular, not work that takes it as an axiom.
Exercise for Mood and Anxiety
A few years ago I ESCed Exercise for Mood and Anxiety, a book that aims to educate people on how exercise can help their mental health and then give them the tools to do so. It did really well at the former: the logic was compelling and the foundational evidence was well cited and mostly true (although exercise science always has wide error bars). But out of 14 people who agreed to read the book and attempt to exercise more, only three reported back to me and none of them reported an increase in exercise. So EfMaA is true and epistemically legible, but nonetheless not very useful.
True but Epistemically Illegible
You Have About Five Words is a poetic essay from Ray Arnold. The final ~paragraph is as follows:
I think the steelman of its core claim, that humans are bad at remembering long nuanced writing and the more people you are communicating with, the more you need to simplify your writing, is obviously true. This is good, because Ray isn’t doing crap to convince me of it. He cites no evidence and gives no explanation of his logic. If I thought nuance increased with the number of readers I would have nothing to say other than “no you’re wrong” or write my own post from scratch, because he gives no hooks to refute. If someone tried to argue that you get ten words rather than five, I would think they were missing the point. If I thought he had the direction right but got the magnitude of the effect wrong enough that it mattered (and he was a stranger rather than a friend), I would not know where to start the discussion.
[Ray gets a few cooperation points back by explicitly labeling this as poetry, which normally I would be extremely happy about, but it weakened its usefulness as an example for this post so right this second I’m annoyed about it.]
False but Epistemically Legible
Mindset
I think Carol Dweck’s Mindset and associated work is very wrong, and I can produce large volumes on specific points of disagreement. This is a sign of a work that is very epistemically legible: I know what her cruxes are, so I can say where I disagree. For all the shit I’ve talked about Carol Dweck over the years, I appreciate that she made it so extraordinarily easy to do so, because she was so clear on where her beliefs came from.
For example, here’s a quote from Mindset
And here’s Scott Alexander’s criticism
Scott could make those criticisms because Dweck described her experiment in detail. If she’d said “we encouraged some kids and discouraged others”, there would be a lot more ambiguity.
Meanwhile, I want to criticize her for lying to children. Messing up children’s feedback system creates the dependencies on adult authorities that lead to problems later in life. This is extremely bad even if it produces short-term improvements (which it doesn’t). But I can only do this with confidence because she specified the intervention.
The Fate of Rome
This one is more overconfident than false. The Fate of Rome laid out very clearly how they were using new tools for recovering meteorological data to determine the weather 2000 years ago, and using that to analyze the Roman empire. Using this new data, it concludes that the peak of Rome was at least partially caused by a prolonged period of unusually good farming weather in the Mediterranean, and that the collapse started or was worsened when the weather began to regress to the mean.
I looked into the archeometeorology techniques and determined that they, in my judgement, had wider confidence intervals than the book indicated, which undercut the causality claims. I wish the book had been more cautious with its evidence, but I really appreciate that they laid out their reasoning so clearly, which made it really easy to look up points I might disagree with them on.
False and Epistemically Illegible
Public Health and Airborne Pathogen Transmission
I don’t know exactly what the CDC’s or WHO’s current stance is on breathing-based transmission of covid, and I don’t care, because they were so wrong for so long in such illegible ways.
When covid started, the CDC and WHO’s story was that it couldn’t be “airborne”, because the viral particle was > 5 microns. That phrasing was already anti-legible for material aimed at the general public, because airborne has a noticeably different definition in virology (”can persist in the air indefinitely”) than it does for popular use (”I can catch this through breathing”). But worse than that, they never provided any justification for the claim. This was reasonable for posters, but not everything was so space constrained, and when I looked in February 2021 I could not figure out where the belief that airborne transmission was rare was coming from. Some researcher eventually spent dozens to hundreds of hours on this and determined the 5 micron number probably came from studies of tuberculosis, which for various reasons needs to get deeper in the lungs than most pathogens and thus has stronger size constraints. If the CDC had pointed to their sources from the start we could have determined the 5 micron limit was bullshit much more easily (the fact that many relevant people accepted it without that proof is a separate issue).
When I wrote up the Carol Dweck example, it was easy. I’m really confident in what Carol Dweck believed at the time of writing Mindset, so it’s really easy to describe why I disagree. Writing this section on the CDC was harder, because I cannot remember exactly what the CDC said and when they said it; a lot of the message lived in implications; their statements from early 2020 are now memory holed and while I’m sure I could find them on archive.org, it’s not really going to quiet the nagging fear that someone in the comments is going to pull up a different thing they said somewhere else that doesn’t say exactly what I claimed they said, or that I view as of a piece with what I cited but both statements are fuzzy enough that it would be a lot of work to explain why I think the differences are immaterial….
That fear and difficulty in describing someone’s beliefs is the hallmark of epistemic illegibility. The wider the confidence interval on what someone is claiming, the more work I have to do to question it.
And More…
The above was an unusually legible case of illegibility. Mostly illegible and false arguments don’t feel like that. They just feel frustrating and bad and like the other person is wrong but it’s too much work to demonstrate how. This is inconveniently similar to the feeling when the other person is right but you don’t want to admit it. I’m going to gesture some more at illegibility here, but it’s inherently an illegible concept so there will be genuinely legible (to someone) works that resemble these points, and illegible works that don’t.
Marks of probable illegibility:
A good example of illegibly bad arguments that are specifically trying to ape legibility are a certain subset of alt-medicine advertisements. They start out very specific, with things like “there are 9804538905 neurons in your brain carrying 38923098 neurotransmitters”, with rigorous citations demonstrating those numbers. Then they introduce their treatment in a way that very strongly implies it works with those 38923098 transmitters but not, like, what it does to them or why we would expect that to have a particular effect. Then they wrap it up with some vague claims about wellness, so you’re left with the feeling you’ll definitely feel better if you take their pill, but if you complain about any particular problem it did not fix they have plausible deniability.
[Unfortunately the FDA’s rules around labeling encourage this illegibility even for products that have good arguments and evidence for efficacy on specific problems, so the fact that a product does this isn’t conclusive evidence it’s useless.]
Bonus Example: Against The Grain
The concept of epistemic legibility was in large part inspired by my first attempt at James C. Scott’s Against the Grain (if that name seems familiar: Scott also coined “legibility” in the sense in which I am using it), whose thesis is that key properties of grains (as opposed to other domesticates) enabled early states. For complicated reasons I read more of AtG without epistemic checking than I usually would, and then checks were delayed indefinitely, and then covid hit, and then my freelancing business really took off… the point is, when I read Against the Grain in late 2019, it felt like it was going to be the easiest epistemic spot check I’d ever done. Scott was so cooperative in labeling his sources, claims, and logical conclusions. But when I finally sat down to check his work, I found serious illegibilities.
I did the spot check over Christmas this year (which required restarting the book). It was maybe 95% as good as I remembered, which is extremely high. At chapter 4 (which is halfway through the book, due to the preface and introduction), I felt kinda overloaded and started to spot check some claims (mostly factual – the logical ones all seemed to check out as I read them). A little resentfully, I checked this graph.
This should have been completely unnecessary, Scott is a decent writer and scientist who was not going to screw up basic dates. I even split the claims section of the draft into two sections, “Boring” and “Interesting”, because I obviously wasn’t going to come up with anything checking names and dates and I wanted that part to be easy to skip.
I worked from the bottom. At first, it was a little more useful than I expected – a major new interpretation of the data came out the same year the book was published, so Scott’s timing on anatomically modern humans was out of date, but not in a way that reflected poorly on him.
Finally I worked my way up to “first walled, territorial state”. Not thinking super hard, I googled “first walled city”, and got a date 3000 years before the one Scott cites. Not a big deal, he specified state, not walls. What can I google to find that out? “Earliest state”, obviously, and the first google hit does match Scott’s timing, but… what made something a state, and how can we assess those traits from archeological records? I checked, and nowhere in the preface, introduction, or first three chapters was “state” defined. No work can define every term it uses, but this is a pretty important one for a book whose full title is Against the Grain: A Deep History of the Earliest States.
You might wonder if “state” had a widespread definition such that it didn’t need to be defined. I think this is not the case for a few reasons. First, Against The Grain is aimed at a mainstream audience, and that requires defining terms even if they’re commonly known by experts. Second, even if a reader knew the common definition of what made a state, how you determine whether something was a state or merely a city from archeology records is crucial for understanding the inner gears of the book’s thesis. Third, when Scott finally gives a definition, it’s not the same as the one on wikipedia.
These aren’t incompatible, but they’re very far from isomorphic. I expect that even though there’s a fairly well accepted definition of state in the relevant field(s), there are disputed edges that matter very much for this exact discussion, in which Scott views himself as pushing back against the commonly accepted narrative.
To be fair, the definition of state was not that relevant to chapters 1-3, which focus on pre-state farming. Unless, you know, your definition of “state” differs sufficiently from his.
Against The Grain was indeed very legible in other ways, but loses basically all of its accrued legibility points and more for not making even a cursory definition of a crucial term in the introduction, and for doing an insufficient job halfway through the book.
This doesn’t mean the book is useless, but it does mean it was going to be more work to extract value from than I felt like putting in on this particular topic.
Why is this Important?
First of all, it’s costing me time.
I work really hard to believe true things and disbelieve false things, and people who argue illegibly make that harder, especially when people I respect treat arguments as more proven than their level of legibility allows them to be. I expect having a handle with which to say “no I don’t have a concise argument about why this work is wrong, and that’s a fact about the work” to be very useful.
More generally, I think there’s a range of acceptable legibility levels for a given goal, but we should react differently based on which legibility level the author chose, and that arguments will be more productive if everyone involved agrees on both the legibility level and on the proper response to a given legibility level. One rule I have is that it’s fine to declare something a butterfly idea and thus off limits to sharp criticism, but that inherently limits the calls to action you can make based on that idea.
Eventually I hope people will develop some general consensus around the rights and responsibilities of a given level of legibility, and that this will make arguments easier and more productive. Establishing those rules is well beyond the scope of this post.
Legibility vs Inferential Distance
You can’t explain everything to everyone all of the time. Some people are not going to have the background knowledge to understand a particular essay of yours. In cases like this, legibility is defined as “the reader walks away with the understanding that they didn’t understand your argument”. Illegibility in this case is when they erroneously think they understand your argument. In programming terms, it’s the difference between a failed function call returning a useful error message (legible), versus failing silently (illegible).
A particularly dangerous way this can occur is when you’re using terms of art (meaning: words or phrases that have very specific meanings within a field) that are also common English words. You don’t want someone thinking you’re dismissing a medical miracle because you called it statistically insignificant, or invalidating the concept of thought work because it doesn’t apply force to move an object.
Cruelly, misunderstanding becomes more likely the more similar the technical definition is to the English definition. I watched a friend use the term “common knowledge” to mean “everyone knows that everyone knows, and everyone knows that everyone knows… and that metaknoweldge enables actions that wouldn’t be possible if it was merely true that everyone knew and thought they were the only one, and those additional possible actions are extremely relevant to our current conversation” to another friend who thought “common knowledge” meant “knowledge that is common”, and had I not intervened the ensuing conversation would have been useless at best.
Costs of Legibility
The obvious ones are time and mental effort, and those should not be discounted. Given a finite amount of time, legibility on one work trades off against another piece being produced at all, and that may be the wrong call.
A second is that legibility can make things really dry. Legibility often means precision, and precision is boring, especially relative to work optimized to be emotionally activating.
Beyond that, legibility is not always desirable. For example, unilateral legibility in an adversarial environment makes you vulnerable, as you’re giving people the keys to the kingdom of “effective lies to tell you”.
Lastly, premature epistemic legibility kills butterfly ideas, which are beautiful and precious and need to be defended until they can evolve combat skills.
How to be Legible
This could easily be multiple posts, I’m including a how-to section here more to help convey the concept of epistemic legibility than write a comprehensive guide to how to do it. The list is not a complete list, and items on it can be faked. I think a lot of legibility is downstream of something harder to describe. Nonetheless, here are a few ways to make yourself more legible, when that is your goal.
A related but distinct skill is making your own thought process legible. John Wentworth describes that here.
Synthesis
“This isn’t very epistemically legible to me” is a valid description (when true), and a valid reason not to engage. It is not automatically a criticism.
“This idea is in its butterfly stage”, “I’m prioritizing other virtues” or “this wasn’t aimed at you” are all valid defenses against accusations of illegibility as a criticism (when true), but do not render the idea more legible.
“This call to action isn’t sufficiently epistemically legible to the people it’s aimed at” is an extremely valid criticism (when true), and we should be making it more often.
I apologize to Carol Dweck for 70% of the vigor of my criticism of her work; she deserves more credit than I gave her for making it so easy to do that. I still think she’s wrong, though.
Epilogue: Developing a Standard for Legibility
As mentioned above, I think the major value add from the concept of legibility is that it lets us talk about whether a given work is sufficiently legible for its goal. To do this, we need to have some common standards for how much legibility a given goal demands. My thoughts on this are much less developed and by definition common standards need to be developed by the community that holds them, not imposed by a random blogger, so I’ll save my ideas for a different post.
Epilogue 2: Epistemic Cooperation
Epistemic legibility is part of a broader set of skills/traits I want to call epistemic cooperation. Unfortunately, legibility is the only one I have a really firm handle on right now (to the point I originally conflated the concepts, until a few conversations highlighted the distinction- thanks friends!). I think epistemic cooperation, in the sense of “makes it easy for us to work together to figure out the truth” is a useful concept in its own right, and hope to write more about it as I get additional handles. In the meantime, there are a few things I want to highlight as increasing or signalling cooperation in general but not legibility in particular:
Thanks to Ray Arnold, John Salvatier, John Wentworth, and Matthew Graves for discussion on this post.